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(Frage) überfällig  | | Datum: | 10:38 Mi 22.04.2009 | | Autor: | Dinker |
Hello
Here are some incorrect English sentences who wait to be corrected.
Ralph is the boy who is most rooted with civilization.
Every character embody a special value system. Ralph stands for democracy, Jack typifies dictatorships element, Piggy links to scienece and Simone embodies the spiritual part.
Jacks seems to offer easy solution to difficult problem.
He lurks the boys by offering them meat, and to have fun by hunting pigs.
Maybe the reader is suprised that Ralph takes part on the ritual dance. The reason for joiing the circle is, that he doesn't want be an outcast and needs people around him to feel comfortable.
It becomes more and more clear, that Piggy's strategy is doomed to fail.
Simone often withdraws in his jungle spot to meditate and analyse what happens on the island.
Ralph is focussed to maintain order and justify
Their appearance is also an indication that their civilized propensity decrease.
The name Piggy is an allusion for his later death.
We need laws, rules policemen to stay civilization, otherwise we would all be savages.
Piggy represents the notion, that everythink can be explained.
Danke
Gruss Dinker
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(Antwort) fertig  | | Datum: | 15:37 Mi 22.04.2009 | | Autor: | Eliss |
> Every character embody a special value system. Ralph stands
> for democracy, Jack typifies dictatorships element, Piggy
> links to scienece and Simone embodies the spiritual part.
Nach every character muss das verb in der 3. person sing. stehen also mit s am ende.
> Jacks seems to offer easy solution to difficult problem.
an easy solution for a difficult problem oder setz es in den plural
> Maybe the reader is suprised that Ralph takes part on the
> ritual dance. The reason for joiing the circle is, that he
> doesn't want be an outcast and needs people around him to
> feel comfortable.
take part in
> Ralph is focussed to maintain order and justify
focused on
> We need laws, rules policemen to stay civilization,
> otherwise we would all be savages.
, fehlt vor policemen; to stay a civilization; besser: we all
hab mal angefangen, is nur das was mir sofort eingefallen is.
gruß
eliss
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(Antwort) fertig | | Datum: | 21:43 Mi 22.04.2009 | | Autor: | mmhkt |
Guten Abend,
hier einige Anmerkungen und Ergänzungen zur bereits vorliegenden Antwort:
> Hello
> Here are some incorrect English sentences who wait to be
> corrected.
("who" gehört da nicht hin, das wird nur bei Personen verwendet.
Vorschlag: [...]sentences waiting to be corrected.
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> Ralph is the boy who is most rooted with ("rooted in" wäre m.E. besser) civilization.
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> Every character embodies a special value system. Ralph stands
> for democracy, Jack typifies dictatorships element,
Hier kommt es darauf an, was Du ausdrücken möchtest. Wenn Jack nur ein Merkmal/Element einer Diktatur verkörpert, dann: [...]dictatorship's element.
Eine Diktatur hat nicht nur ein Merkmal, wenn Jack also mehrere verkörpert, dann: [...]dictatorship elements.
> Piggy links to scienece and Simone embodies the spiritual part.
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> Jacks seems to offer easy solution to difficult problem. Siehe eliss.
> He lurks the boys by offering them meat, and to have fun by
> hunting pigs.
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> Maybe the reader is suprised that Ralph takes part on the
> ritual dance. The reason for joining the circle is, that he
> doesn't want be an outcast and needs people around him to
> feel comfortable.
>
> It becomes more and more clear, that Piggy's strategy is
> doomed to fail.
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> Simone often withdraws in his jungle spot to meditate and
> analyse what happens on the island.
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> Ralph is focussed to maintain order and justify
(justify bedeutet nach meiner Kenntnis z.B. "begründen" oder "rechtfertigen". Das scheint mir hier nicht zu passen. Was sollte denn ausgedrückt werden?)
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> Their appearance is also an indication that their civilized
> propensity decreases.
("propensity to civilisation" kommt mir hier passender vor)
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> The name Piggy is an allusion for his later death.
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> We need laws, rules policemen to stay civilization,
> otherwise we would all be savages.
Siehe eliss.
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> Piggy represents the notion, that everything can be
> explained.
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Vielleicht sieht jemand anderes noch mehr.
Schönen Gruß
mmhkt
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(Mitteilung) Reaktion unnötig  | | Datum: | 09:56 Do 23.04.2009 | | Autor: | Dinker |
Hallo
Danke für deine Korrekturen
Mit justify meinte ich justice
Gruss Dinker
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(Mitteilung) Reaktion unnötig | | Datum: | 11:20 Sa 23.05.2009 | | Autor: | matux |
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